🚫 Stop Sending DMs That Reek of Desperation (Steal This Cold Message That Actually Got a Reply) 95% of DMs being sent right now? 💩 They read like a Fiverr VA copy-pasted it from a 2021 YouTube tutorial. You know the ones… ❌ "Hey [First Name], I help busy founders scale to 6-figures using my proven 3-step system…" ❌ "Quick question for you... 👀" ❌ "I saw your profile and thought we might be a great fit!" If you've ever sent one of those, this is your intervention. Because you're not just being ignored—you're being categorized. 🧠 As forgettable. 🗑️ As background noise. 📉 As someone not worth replying to. 🧠 How I Flipped It, just like @Jay Feldman teaches. Instead of ignoring a guy who'd been DM'ing me like an amnesiac AI… And this guy is a fairly well established influencer with a sizable IG, YT & Skool Community. I sent this: Not gonna lie --> you've hit me with more "Hey Ian"s & "How's Biz?" than an MLM recruiter w/ amnesia 😂 Figured I'd wait to reply until I had something worth showing. In the last 12 months: 222 new customers. $572K in revenue. {SCREENSHOT PROOF} All from a similar offer and audience size to yours. Not saying you're leaving money on the table... But if you are, your weak ass DM game is probably why. ✌️☮️ Guess what happens next? 👀 He replied instantly. Then booked a call. 🧨 Why It Worked ✅ Pattern interrupt – Casual. Funny. Not trying to sell. ✅ Leads with proof – No bait. Just data. ✅ Curiosity over pitch – Hints at the gap without bragging. ✅ Reverses the dynamic – He chased me. 💥 Want to Write DMs Like This? Here's the formula: Open with a jab – playful, honest, bold Drop results – numbers > adjectives Create curiosity – no neediness, just a window Position yourself as the shortcut – without pitching Shut up and let them ask 👉 𝘾𝙤𝙢𝙢𝙚𝙣𝙩 "𝘿𝙈𝙎𝙇𝘼𝙋" 𝙖𝙣𝙙 𝙄'𝙡𝙡 𝙝𝙖𝙫𝙚 𝙅𝙖𝙮 𝘿𝙈 𝙮𝙤𝙪 𝙖 𝙛𝙧𝙚𝙚 𝙩𝙤𝙤𝙡 𝙩𝙝𝙖𝙩 𝙧𝙚𝙬𝙧𝙞𝙩𝙚𝙨 𝙮𝙤𝙪𝙧 𝘿𝙈'𝙨 It using the exact method above. Stop Getting Ignored. No more spam. No more guessing.

Free after-hours AI receptionist for small restoration companies (water, fire, mold). Answers all calls 24/7, captures job details, notifies the owner instantly. No contract, no setup cost. Paid plan starts after the trial converts. ICP: Owner-operated restoration companies, 1–5 employees, no dedicated receptionist, $200K–$1.5M revenue. Core pain: missing emergency calls after hours = losing jobs to competitors who answered. Sequence structure (4 emails total): — Day 1: Main email. Pain angle = missed calls lose jobs. CTA = reply "yes" to get the system set up. — Day 3: Follow-up #1. Angle = it's not about being the best company, it's about who answered first. — Day 7: Follow-up #2. Angle = direct financial cost of one missed call ($1K–$5K). Restate the free offer. — Day 12: Breakup email. Low-pressure close. Leave the door open. After a "yes" reply: prospect receives a short Loom video showing exactly how the system works and what happens on their first call. Formatting rules applied: plain text only, no links in email #1, subject lines under 5 words, body under 6 lines, single low-friction CTA per email. What I'd like feedback on: 1. Is the pain angle strong enough for this ICP, or should it be sharper? 2. Does the free offer lower trust instead of raising it? 3. Is the follow-up spacing (3 / 7 / 12) correct, or should it be tighter? 4. Any line in the sequence that feels like it would trigger spam or read as mass email? Email copy: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bhdxBfbf5Pmc9Y3boGthWW43V3EJ9uXu8iEOleotkuw/edit?usp=sharing

I think my copy is pretty good. I'm probably wrong lol. Drop your harshest feedback below. Line by line, word by word, I don't care. If something sounds salesy, weak, or cringe, call it out. "Hi Valerie, Searched "exterminator Chandler" on Maps this morning. Simply Green Pest Control is in the top 3. Arizona Termite & Pest Solutions isn't. That gap is costing you calls every week. Most people pick from the top 3 and never scroll further. I mapped out what it would take for Arizona Termite & Pest Solutions to start showing up ahead of Simply Green Pest Control in Chandler. Shows exactly where the gap is and what to fix first. Does it make sense for me to send it over?" ​ (Bonus points if you rewrite the part you hated)

Im targeting small service based business owners like plumbers hvac etc. 60% of the emails are like "admin@..." or "info@..." What kind of copy do we send them when we cant mention the name. Do we ask the email to be forwarded to the email? whats the move

Would love some honest feedback on this cold email I’m testing for agencies, trying to sell lead generation services to them. Goal is to lead with value (lead list + outreach angle) without sounding like a typical lead gen pitch. Hey {{FirstName}}, This might be slightly off but I was looking at {{Company}} and had a thought. I pulled together a small list of companies similar to your current clients that you could realistically land, and outlined how I’d approach them to turn this into a steady flow of conversations. Made sure they actually align with what you’re already doing. Might be completely wrong here, so I didn't want to run with it without checking with you first. Want me to send it over? Main thing I’m trying to figure out: • Does this feel different enough from typical cold emails? • Is the “value-first” angle clear without sounding like a pitch? • Anything you’d tweak to increase reply rate? Appreciate any direct feedback 🙏 @Jay Feldman @Jordan Wiseman