Roast This Cold Email Copy · Lead Gen Secrets

Karl Kyamko

Feb 18 (edited) • Copywriting ✍️

Roast This Cold Email Copy

Cold Email Copy for eCom Amazon Agency targeting eCom Amazon brand owners

Can you write better copy for this? Need feedback as well.

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Subject: quick question

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V1 Copy (Opener)

{{firstName}}! Wasn't quite sure if I should reach out to you or someone else at {{brand}}, but I noticed your Amazon store isn't fully dominating your own brand name in search results. Competitors are showing up when customers look for you specifically.

This past year I've worked with 23 DTC Amazon brands (a lot like {{brand}}) fixing exactly this. I recently helped a jewelry brand 50X their monthly revenue, scaling from $10K → $500K in just 3 months (hard to believe, but it's true).

I've already put together a quick analysis on {{brand}} showing exactly where you're leaving revenue on the table and what to fix first. I'd just need your permission to share it with you.

Just reply "YES" and I'll send it over.

Best,

Karl @ Company

P.S. No charge, completely on us.

"If you’d rather not to bothered, reply 'no thanks'."

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V2 Copy (Opener)

{{firstName}}, wasn’t quite sure if I should reach out to you or someone else at {{brand}} - but your Amazon store is not fully dominating in search results when customers look for your brand specifically - your competitors are showing up instead.

I recently helped a jewelry brand go from $10K → $500K/mo in 3 months. 50X sounds crazy right? (but it's true).

I've put together a quick analysis on {{brand}} showing where exactly you're leaving revenue on the table.

Mind if I send it over? Just reply “YES”.

Best,

Karl @ Company

P.S. No charge, completely on us.

"If you’d rather not be bothered, reply 'no thanks'."

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V3 Copy (Opener)

{{firstName}}, why are your competitors popping up when I search for {{brand}} specifically on Amazon search results? If it’s not me, then your customers are seeing the exact same thing.

I recently helped a similar brand (a lot like yours) go from $10K → $500K/mo in 3 months by fixing exactly this. 50X sounds crazy right? (but it's true).

I’ll show you exactly what’s wrong and where you’re leaving revenue on the table.

Want me to send it over?

Best,

Karl @ Company

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