@Alan Brash @David Hinnebusch @Chris Dyer We talked about this in the New Member Coaching today... a YouTube short that broke out and was part of what lead Danny and Michael Philippou aka Rackaracka to break into making mainstream horror like the fantastically dark Talk to Me. This is intense, so you've been warned!

I've now read 3 other Forge members' scripts that i believe are really good at just getting to the point in their Action. I know there's more of you out here. My ask? How would you economize the following Action segment? -------------------------- She turns and sprints back towards the office. Jacob continues walking, his drink in hand, almost smiling as he walks past the now empty therapy rooms. At the elevator, he looks down an adjoining darkened hallway. The entrance is blocked by a cable attached to two stanchions. Jacob looks around then stealthily slips over the cable into the hallway. He’s the only person on the floor. It’s dark other than light coming from a frosted window on a door near the end. He slowly moves towards it. As he gets closer, the sound of faint voices is heard. Screaming voices.

New Member Monday Coaching -- Feb 9 - 10 a.m. Pacific Time. If you're new and have never been in a coaching call, now's your chance to experience how as little as one session can completely transform the way you see your writing. I'm not even going to try to sell you on the radical transformations that are going on here with Writer's Forge writers, just look at the responses below, from this week alone. This community is about teaching you how to see your pages and characters through the eyes of a professional writer. Not pre-made formulas like Save the Cat or The Heroes Journey... this is not plug and play. This is about you connecting deeply with your work, so the reader can feel and related and fall in love with your characters from page 1. It's about developing your own unique voice. Not mimicking the crowd. If you're stuck in rewrites you don't know how to finish, or feel your story just isn't firing on all cylinders and don't know why, come experience what true coaching and community is all about. Drop your pages below. And meanwhile, have a look at what your fellow writers actually have to say. This is just a small, enthusiastic sample of the many writers here who are falling in love with writing all over again. DM me or sign up below. Space is limited. Dave Lena Lieuvin This was so helpful and insightful, my head is full of ideas I have to put on paper now. Thanks so much everyone. Can’t wait for more on Friday 🔥 Anna Fermin It seems ridiculous to me that this was only my 2nd time in a coaching call, because I feel I've learned sooo much already from David and the community at the Writer's Forge in the short time I've been here. So impressed with the other projects on this call. And truly thankful for the feedback. Thanks everyone! Great job, all! Jason Byrley

Love the idea of the Pats starting yet another much-hated dynasty. But also love me some Sam Darnold come back story. So I'll be good however this game goes. Predictions: Pats. Crucial mistake cost Darnold in the 4th Quarter. Situational football rules the day. But... this takes me back to The Goat, TB12. And the horrible start vs Atlanta, years ago. They fell behind 28-3, before storming back and winning in overtime. And maybe nothing looked worse than when Brady threw a pick 6 when they were down 14, to let the score go to 21-0. But he gathered himself and his team. "Come on now, laser focus! We gotta play harder! Tougher!" And led the greatest comeback in sports history. I've often felt this way when battling a script. Trying to figure out the way forward. Feeling lost, but knowing it's not in my DNA to give up and being determined to fight my way through. I genuinely look to Brady as a model for that. Selected 199th in the draft. 4th quarterback on the roster, behind the first QB ever to sign a $100M contract. But showing up everyday in practice and staying late, with the mentality that this would be his team one day and his work ethic would make that inevitable. I'm curious, who's your model for the way you work, for how you move forward when things get tough? Oh, and what's your pick? I'm going 27-24 Pats. Vrabel's got this team dialed in. I could be wrong, but even if I am, with the mentality Brady set down for that organization, even a loss will be a learning experience on their way back to greatness IMHO. Then again, I'm the same guy who was at a huge Super Bowl party years ago and everybody was making fun of me when the Pats were down 28-3. And I said, we've got them right where we want them. Then I might have turned around and flipped them all a double bird when the Pats won. I'm not saying I did. But I'm not saying I didn't either. Go Pats!