Too wordy? · Royalty Ronin

Too wordy?

I have known him long enough to have candid convos..as a buyer..I probably overpitched him on his last offer..so I gave it a rest until I saw him pitching a hands on for 10 spots and wrote this..(edited out first line and his name)

This would have been a perfect auction item! After the frenzied fun got you a premium price for the first one(plus an extra bonus)..you get an exact amount the other bidders are willing to spend. Then you dm them while they are still in buy mode and sell them the same deal(minus the bonus) and watch the backend $$$skyrocket past the original auction mate!. Value for all!

I'll take the risk on$ and get it rolling brother!😁 I ain't bullshitting ya we're making $$ and actually having a good time doing it.

Merry Christmas

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He sent his out today as an in case everyone missed my first email..

Whaddaya'll think. Criticism creates perfection so lemme know..

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