Feedback for a couple Female Indie Pop songs please?

Hey gang, I'm back again with a couple pop songs that I'm trying to finish up this week and could use a little feedback! Both tracks have been sitting on my hard drive because I could never get vocal takes that I liked, so I had two different vocalists come in to help me out with them.

https://s.disco.ac/egpgqgiisbbs

BENJAMIN

-I'm definitely going to re-title this one. After listening to it, what is a title that you would give this song?

-Originally produced this one in my classic dark pop/Tate McRae/Nessa Barrett style, but after sitting with it for awhile and not totally loving it, I was thinking of remixing in into a more electronic pop song to match some of my other more "Boss Pop" songs in my catalog. Worth a shot? Keep it as is? Have both in my catalog?

LA LA LA

-A song I wrote years ago, but ended up recording after seeing a TAXI brief wanting music similar to Obsessed by Olivia Rodrigo, so I used that song as a reference. I'll link that song below too. This style is a little out of my comfort zone, so I'm completely unsure if this instrumentation works? What else does it need/not need?

-The vocalist is a dark pop singer like myself, should I add more dark pop elements to suit her voice or will it work as is?

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Feedback for a couple Female Indie Pop songs please?