video ads script am working on, any advice would be appreciated
Context: Note: the script is translated in english, but the context of the copy is correct - Client: Imene, optician 13 years, store owner 4 years, Roaaya generates 5M DZD/year - Target: Optometrists in Algeria, store open 1-3 months, empty chairs, panicking - Offer: 30 hours one-on-one at her clinic. 4 modules: Mindset, Technical Skill, Personalized Selling (neuroscience), Professional Instagram - Price: 120,000 DZD - low aware / low sophisticated / cold traffic - Format: Vertical video, captions on, her talking to camera ## CONCEPT 1 **Name:** concept_1-video-V1-06_15 **Angle:** Mechanism **Avatar:** Optometrist, clinic open 1-3 months, empty chairs, panic **Format:** Vertical, captions on **Visual:** Her in clinic, talking to camera, natural light Video script: **Hook:** The real reason your new optical store isn't generating the cash you expected isn't the store itself. It's something else they never taught you in school. **Lead:** You spent a ton of money buying quality equipment, you paid the rent, and now you're wondering if you made a mistake. **Body:** My name is Imene. Optician for 13 years, owner of Roaaya for 4 years. And 4 years ago, the night I signed the lease for my store, I almost cried in my car because I didn't know if I made the right choice. The first few months, I had nights where I'd calculate my debts on my phone at 2 AM. I knew I had good equipment. But something was off in how I talked to people and I couldn't figure out what. Until the day I understood one simple thing about how people make buying decisions. I changed just one thing in how I communicate with every customer who walks in. And the next month, my sales doubled. Today Roaaya generates over 5 million dinars per year. And the system I discovered β I call it the Communication Loop β revolves around 3 simple steps. The first is what I call the 5-Minute Rule. Studies show that a customer's decision to trust you or not happens in the first 5 minutes they enter your store.