For those experienced in Ad copy, how do you go about creating ads?

Hey guys; here are two VSL scripts that I wrote. Feel free to review them and any comment is valuable, the first on is in the 1st Tab and the second in the 2nd Tab. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VPaxzlSv0fvxZvuNKtEEHUvpONKdVMu6j4hQnI12aGU/edit?usp=sharing

Hey guys, I just hoped off call with a prospect, and it was successful. I pitched for emails, but the prospect sent me a VSL script and asked to tweak it to have more people sign up. What do you think I should start doing ?

From now on, Every month or so I will create a new post like this and you can submit your copy or outreach in the comments below. Other people will still be able to review it, And you can still leave comments to each other, While we make everything more organized. Here is the template for how you should share your copy: "<type of copy> in <niche>: <link>" Example: 3 Emails in the fitness niche: <link> Here is the template for how you should share your outreach: "<type of outreach>: <link>" Example: Instagram DM outreach: <link> Now share your copy and outreach in the comments below until the end of the week, And make sure you come here to review other people's copy & outreach as well! That's it for this update. Costin.

I outreached to this prospect with some value of quiz funnels and funnel building and she responded disinterested in funnels but interested in VSLs so I don't know whether to follow up with more VSL value or negotiate with her more ? What should I do next