Both are inspiring, but the new one is much more clear! I understand the the process and rhythm. I'd like to know a bit more about the outcomes. The Bullet points describe activities, but could be more powerful if they include the outcomes. You can find that very easily by simply adding "So that" to the end of each activity sentence and you'll see the outcomes. I want to know what happens by planting intentions, releasing, and growing my intuition. This will build desire to sign up. Because I'll see and want the after picture. I'd be careful using "free" too many times. It lowers perspective value and starts to look insecure. I'd also like to know who she is before she joins. What is she struggling with? Speak to me on an emotional level. You said she feels called to grow and let go with moon cycles. Does she already know that part of moon cycles is letting go? Or is she just curious and feels connected to the moon? I'd also change the tone a bit from invitation to declaration. You know the power of what you offer. Stand on that ground. Overall, it's great and inviting. So these are just a few tweaks that could make it land a little bit stronger. But trust your own listening. You know you community and message.

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@Elise Hodge Very helpful. Thank you. It's so helpful to hear from someone who doesn't know what you do. It's interesting how when we try to use interesting language, sometimes that just complicates things. I like the distinction you made a couple times about having to think too hard to figure something out. That's a good filter to look through.

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@Anna Sabino so awesome! Shine a big bright light on that concept more often so you become known for it. And people's desire will be high, because they know exactly what picture they are stepping into.

@Anna Sabino you're very welcome. I'll look into your community. I just published my very first YouTube video last week. I definitely feel like I'm at the beginning of a learning curve.