The drop between call one and call two is almost always a momentum problem, not a script problem. By the time the zoom call comes around the prospect has had time to talk themselves out of it, get busy, or just lose the feeling they had on the first call. The script is not what keeps them showing up, the touchpoints between the two calls are. What moved the needle for me: a short video the day before referencing something specific from the first call, then a text the morning of. Not a reminder, something that reminds them why they got on the first call. Show rates went from around 50% to 80% doing just that. The line you added about showing thm what they need regardless of whether they work with you is good instinct. It reduces the pressure of the second call. I would lean into that harder in the sequence between calls, not just in the script.