While I have been writing, I have noticed holes in my story, as well as my power system, and that's perfectly okay. First drafts are rough, and I wanted to go over some of the changes I made since I recorded my pitch. Setting—Torrey, Utah, is now out the window! The entirety of the book will be in Mesquite, Nevada, to LA, which sparks the question, 'Why?' Well, Torrey, Utah, actually has a population of just over one hundred, which is extremely low, too low for my book. Zarth's last name—our protagonist in this story is 'Zarth Tadashi.' I felt that the last name 'Tadashi didn't feel original enough so I have updated it too 'Kagari.' Power system—The biggest change in the book was this. There is just so much to go over that I wouldn't be able to write it here. For those of you that are interested, I have attached a file going through all the changes. Villains I have added a new villain race called 'Titans.' If you're interested, I have included that in the file I have attached. Writing style—One thing I have learned is that writing is a skill, and it takes time to learn how to do that. I started over when I hit ten thousand words. I felt that at that time I didn't have the story put together enough to start writing, and it was more than beyond editing. Extra—If any of you are interested in reading the new prologue or first chapter, I would be more than happy to share it with you. Also, if anyone has any questions, I would be happy to explain.