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ZEN STORY AND FILM ACADEMY
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Here’s the recording to this week’s meeting!
It was great having Max and Justin and Stu and I together on this. So sorry those of you couldn’t make it, but feel free to jump in next week! I won’t be able to make next week, but let me know if someone can record it. If it turns out only can record it, then I will do so on the 17th. Thanks again, everyone, and Happy Writing!! :)
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Sorry I missed this. I meant to message earlier. We had an event at my work and I just got home.
Nov 6 •
EXILE - Dream Sequence scene
Hey all, I've got a scene that's part of act one and the intent is to start to give Eve a sense of impending doom that something is coming for her and something is about to happen. (The Originator character I mentioned in class). What I'd like feedback on: - Does it make enough sense while still leaving some intrigue? - Is it clear on the three different characters? (Originator, Enforcer, and Observer) - Is it too short? - Other edits/grammar errors? Things to cut down? Other context: - Cleo is Eve's cat. - Asper is Eve's best friend
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First off, did you make your own language? That's a ton of work. Great job! I think it makes sense. Yes to the three characters. I think it's to the point. I wanted to clarify that the galaxies are swirling around in the originator's form not around him. He says he is pleased and then you say in the description he is pleased. I think that you probably don't need it in the description. Also you say the moon seems bigger somehow. Maybe there is a way we can show that or maybe that is for the videographer's creative interpretation? I'm not sure on the rules there. Last thing we talked about in class not needing suddenly because you have that she jolts up and suddenly flies out of bed. I am excited to read more!
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