@Marcel Pluecken Sales page plz review: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Uff2fwVN1hcjauE3LFIzwF5PkOST7WRODixHZIZALgc/edit?usp=drivesdk

@Marcelo Uceda Move authority to the top: “I edited for Ruri Ohama, Andrew Kirby, Pierre Dalati…” Tighten the hook: Start with the emotion/pain first, then show what drove change. Add proof for big claim: One sentence testimonial, data point, or reference to performance. Mention agency owners earlier: So they know the message is for them from the start. 8.5/10 You’ve got a strong, emotionally engaging story that builds tension and makes your offer feel earned.

@Noshant Ad 1. Add stronger authority early on (e.g. time spent, # of products tried). 2. Reword presumptive statements like “Give your skin the care it deserves.” 3. Clarify vague references (“that devil” → name it). 4. Add proof or backup for synthetic skincare claims. 5. Slightly sharpen the CTA (make it click-focused or action-based). 6. Split a few longer sentences to fit 16-word max. 7.8 / 10

https://docs.google.com/document/d/12RIAOVp_tS4b1kCgz2jIt7y6eCHeM2YJ7BqHkssfm8o/edit?usp=drivesdk

@Shrirang Kekare thanks mate No it's a borrowed authority

https://docs.google.com/document/d/12RIAOVp_tS4b1kCgz2jIt7y6eCHeM2YJ7BqHkssfm8o/edit?usp=drivesdk