@Kyle Mataya Your email is good Hera are a few suggestions to make them even better 1️⃣ Fix Some Clunky Sentences & Grammar Issues There are a few grammar and flow issues that could be polished for better readability. For example: ❌ "I’m willing to bet that almost 90% of what fitness influencer Preach ain’t helping you." ✅ "I’m willing to bet that 90% of what fitness influencers preach isn’t actually helping you." ❌ "A lot of fitness so-called 'fitness gurus' thrive on flashy, overhyped workout plans designed to lure you in." ✅ "Many so-called 'fitness gurus' thrive on flashy, overhyped workout plans designed to lure you in." These small refinements will make the email sound more polished. --- 2️⃣ Clarify the Nutrition Argument The transition from calling out fitness influencers to introducing nutrition as the missing piece could be a bit smoother. Right now, it jumps too quickly from "They don’t talk about nutrition" to "Hold your horses." ✅ Try adding something like: "Most influencers only focus on workouts, completely ignoring the other half of the equation—nutrition. But no matter how hard you train, if your diet isn’t on point, you won’t see real results." This will make the nutrition argument feel more natural and convincing. --- 3️⃣ Strengthen the CTA Right now, the CTA is clear but could be more persuasive. Instead of: ❌ "Then Grab my e-book fitness plans and start transforming your body the right way." ✅ Try: "Stop wasting time on workout plans that don’t deliver. Get my e-book today and start seeing real results—with the right balance of training and nutrition." This makes the action feel urgent and rewarding.

@Aatif Irshad Here are some suggestions that you could use toake your email better 1. Strengthen the Transition from Pain to Solution Issue: The email jumps too quickly from struggle to success. Adding more “before vs. after” contrast would increase impact. Fix: Show what life looked like before Authority Architecture and how everything changed after. Before: “I know because I was there. Until I built… Authority Architecture.” After: “I was stuck in the same cycle—endless sales calls, low-paying clients, and exhausting hustle. Until I built… Authority Architecture.” 2. Make the Offer More Tangible Issue: “Authority Architecture” sounds great, but what is it? A system? A course? A framework? Fix: Briefly explain what it includes. Example: “Authority Architecture is my 3-step system that positions you as the high-value expert, so clients come to you—no chasing, no sales calls.” 3. Clarify the CTA for Action Issue: The placeholder “Click here to (dream state without roadblock)” is vague. Fix: Use a benefit-driven, action-focused CTA. Examples: “Click here to see how to get high-paying clients without sales calls.” “Watch this free training to unlock Authority Architecture.”

I just dropped a review

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1B8_yTkmJoXMHjL7wZpJYTsPwU8FX5_jrmdavVpSLqCw/edit?usp=drivesdk Please review