Hey Bryan—just reviewed your email and wanted to share quick feedback: What's working: - Your subject line ("Quit Your Job & Have Fun") grabs attention immediately. - Structuring your content into 3 key points makes it easy to follow. - Your CTA is simple and frictionless ("reply 'DM'"). - Loved your advice on finding customers before perfecting your product—very valuable. Suggestions: - Lead with the benefit: Readers should quickly understand "what's in it for them." Try moving your key benefit into the first few lines. - Be more conversational: Some parts feel scripted. Read it aloud—if it doesn't sound natural, tweak it. The "plane without wings" metaphor, for instance, feels a bit forced. - Tighten spacing: Stick to single spacing for a cleaner, more professional look. - Mix up the structure: Varying paragraph length and style helps keep readers engaged. - Strengthen your opening: Instead of a broad statement ("We all have that dream..."), try something more specific and emotionally connected to Rambo’s situation. - Explain "SIKH": Clarify the acronym to avoid confusion for readers unfamiliar with it. Overall, you're on the right track. A bit of refinement and this will be a strong email. Hope this helps! 🙌

@Ali Raza L Thanks for sharing your work! I'll take a look and provide some feedback. Keep up the good work!

@Timotej Holub Thanks for sharing your work! I'll take a look and provide some feedback. Keep up the good work!

@Brendan ChimazuruIt's great to see you sharing your work! I'll take a look and provide some feedback. Keep up the good work!

@Nima Bagherabadi It's great to see you seeking feedback! I'm sure Tina's insights will be valuable. Best of luck with your copy!