I would start with isolating the pain point in your copy and then offering the solution sunil is right, the jargon is confusing. move your 'as seen on' up to above the fold or right below - i would would add a short intro explaining your offer/service (basically outline the transformation you are offering and the pain point you are solving for) to the video at the bottom and use as a VSL - maybe shorten and create more of hype video style also the youtube style thumbnails instead of the traditional testimonial thumbs are confusing, I would change this. also the attention high school parents, i would niche that down - attention high school parents with children taking their [enter exam name]

@Carson Weekley yea so typically it would be a picture of the person who is reviewing you (photo included) - I'm just finding the youtube style thumbs a bit confusing and as a viewer doesn't register to me as a testimonial - looks like your are linking your youtube channel which doesn't necessarily imply social proof

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Copy on the second creative is definitely better this transformation photo you have on the bottom, i could put that up at the top even like above the fold if you can, there is alottt of text so I would suggest breaking that up with pictures, video testimonials- maybe an about you with a photo of yourself - your target audience (busy moms) i would image they don't get a lot of time to them selves, so make them feel seen and heard! I would do that by sharing a story that they can relate with. also I would you have to scroll quite a bit to get to a buy button, I would move that up also what is a 1 hour custom gameplan? I wouldn't lead with that because there's no value behind it yet - sell the destination not the plane ticket. so touch on pain points and then solve