Nov 6 • General discussion
EXILE - Dream Sequence scene
Hey all, I've got a scene that's part of act one and the intent is to start to give Eve a sense of impending doom that something is coming for her and something is about to happen. (The Originator character I mentioned in class).
What I'd like feedback on:
- Does it make enough sense while still leaving some intrigue?
- Is it clear on the three different characters? (Originator, Enforcer, and Observer)
- Is it too short?
- Other edits/grammar errors? Things to cut down?
Other context:
- Cleo is Eve's cat.
- Asper is Eve's best friend
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EXILE - Dream Sequence scene
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