21d • My Daily Journal
Day 2: Over the River | Draft 1, Verse 1
Here is a song I will be updating that I am working on:
Verse 1:
(new edited version)
Purpose: I'm going after work to see the guys, and my girl will be back home. I want her to know I work hard for you, and I need these nights to remind me of who I am.
We’re going out tonight to Frankie's house
and I just know we'll be alright
My polish queen your alone to dream
On our front porch crying, just know the things Ill do,
I work hard for you
I still need the nights when it’s me and the boys we go
Down over the river
Down, down over the river
(original old version)
We’re going out tonight to Marco’s house
And I can already see the flood lights over valley park
When the boss man says it’s all over we’re gonna send it tonight’s it’s what I do I work hard for you
On the nights when it’s me and the boys we go
Down over the river
Down, down over the river
Notes
-Its best to go line by line after I free-write
-The best songs come from simply playing until something comes, then listening back to see if it stick, from there, editing until the words are right.
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Day 2: Over the River | Draft 1, Verse 1
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