To be honest, you have good body control, especially in your torso, arms, and legs, but I feel you need to work a bit more on your facial expressions, emphasize your steps according to the vibe of the song (in this case, I think you need to emphasize them a bit more), and be more confident. Good luck with your training! :)
I know its messy at the end, but what should i polish and with this, how many % do you think that i have of passing the first round? (Ignore my face in the start)
I would give you a 30% chance of being accepted. I feel you need to loosen up a bit in your steps and have more precision and concentration, especially in facial expressions and in the movement of your arms and legs. Clearly, hand movements are important too. You also need to improve your posture, from what I can see. Good job on your training! :)