Okay. We will get you sorted out. Promise.

@Deremiah Cpe my goodness, my friend, you have just given me a higher bar to leap over whenever I attend anyone else's event because you really took the time to observe and find all the things that were praiseworthy and that worked, and you gave positive reinforcement to each member of my team. I treasure this. Thank you, sir. Let's talk soon, shall we?

@Deb Tracy Spaeaking of STORIES 0 I strongly encourage each of you to begin collecting yours and writing them out as “Finished Writing” so you can lift those blocks out of storage and MAKE USE OF THEM. I taught a $5,0000 workshop a few years ago about how to build your Universal Personal Story Archive, and cross-reference it so that each story had a LEAST 3 different application. One attendee said he got MORE THAN 10 X his money back frin building and using those stories.

I also love this! Wow!

Critique of Your Audience Analysis, Deborah What's Exceptionally Strong 1. Your Pain Point Diagnosis is Visceral The line "I don't WANT to be done, I've got more to live, to give" is devastating and authentic. This captures the existential crisis of capable women at midlife better than most positioning I've seen. It's not about ambition—it's about mattering. 2. Your Paralysis Pattern is Precisely Articulated "Starts and stops and redirects, only to circle back and repeat it" — this is the exact loop your clients are trapped in. You can feel the exhaustion and shame in that description. You're not describing surface behavior; you're naming the experience of being stuck. 3. Your Competitor Failure Analysis is Incisive "Stops at the pretty words, doesn't provide the practical path" — this is a sharp critique of the transformation-industrial-complex. You've identified that most coaching is: - Too conceptual (identity work without embodiment) - Too superficial (symptoms vs. core) - Too short-term (doesn't support duration to complete) This suggests you understand why your approach will be different. 4. The "Dramatic Qualification Gap" Insight "They see OTHERS who are dramatically less qualified... getting the deals, getting the attention" — this is psychologically astute. It's not envy; it's proof to themselves that they're the problem, which deepens the paralysis. Brilliant diagnostic detail. 5. Internal vs. External Success Mismatch You've identified that many of your clients have "the financial piece figured out" but gaps in relationships/health. This reframes success as incomplete rather than failed, which is more accurate and less shame-inducing. Significant Opportunities 1. Your "What If" Section is Dramatically Weaker Than the Problem Issue: After 1,500+ words of razor-sharp problem diagnosis, your breakthrough questions feel... vague and unanchored. - "What if we could imagine ourselves as if observing our life in a movie?" (This is interesting but unexplored) - "What if we imagined our life if we had been raised as a man?" (This trails off incomplete) - "What if there was a growth pathway that would actually lead to your destiny?" (Too abstract—what pathway?)

Critique of "The Zen Jump™" What It Does Exceptionally Well I liked this so much I kinda got deep into the weeds. Let me know if you want to get on the phone and talk about this! -Ray 1. Narrative Integration The Marcus and Alyssa storyline is brilliantly executed. Their relationship struggles, business pressures, and parenting challenges feel authentic and create emotional investment. The scenes are vivid and relatable—particularly the 2:47am opening, the cold silence between them, and Maya asking "why are you sad?" 2. Diagnosis of the Problem The five forces framework (mental models, emotional loops, fundamental compensation, root identification, preference addiction) is incisive and well-articulated. The analysis of why intelligent people struggle with decisions is compelling and non-obvious. 3. Intellectual Rigor Chapter 3's treatment of the Tao is philosophically sophisticated without being academic. The "something from nothing" paradox and the "Light Before the Big Bang" concept are handled with appropriate gravitas. You don't dumb it down. 4. Structural Clarity The organization is logical: Problem → Territory → (presumably) Solution. Each chapter has clear subsections that guide the reader through complex ideas systematically. 5. Tone and Voice The writing is direct, unsentimental, and refreshingly free of typical self-help platitudes. Phrases like "Not because you're weak. Because you're operating from broken framework" cut through without coddling. Significant Strengths 1. The "No Easy Exit" Message Your insistence that there's "NO EXIT from indecision through mind programs" is courageous. Most business books promise quick fixes. You're saying the entire operating system is broken—this will resonate deeply with exhausted high-achievers. 2. Concrete Examples Marcus's vendor decision, Alyssa's hiring paralysis, the Wednesday night fight—these ground abstract concepts in lived experience. The "development of karma" through cascading consequences is particularly well-illustrated.