Welcome!

I think you’re moving in the right direction, but it still feels a little broad and process-focused. Right now you’re describing how you help people, but I’m not sure exactly who it’s for or what problem you’re solving. The phrase “backend systems” makes sense to you because you’re close to it, but your ideal client may not be searching for that solution. They may be thinking, “I have followers but not enough clients,” or “I’m spending too much time creating content and not making enough money.” I would challenge you to simplify it even further. Who specifically do you help? What’s the biggest pain they’re experiencing? What’s the transformation they get? If you can answer those three questions in one sentence, you’ll probably land on something much clearer and more compelling.

@Ryan Carnohan now they have two towers that are working. And both will be able to catch the booster and star ship if need. Soon they’ll have more regular launches! I’m planning on driving down there and staying at a campsite near by. Watching launches. It’s gunna be sweet!