@Manal Zia right next to where it says general discussion, click on writing tasks

Task Response — The question asks to what extent you agree/disagree, which invites a nuanced answer. Saying you "completely agree" and then writing a full paragraph on benefits creates a contradiction. Either defend your position more strongly or use a partial agreement structure. Introduction - Body Paragraph 1: Negative effect #1 - Body Paragraph 2: Negative effect #2 - Conclusion Fully agree/disagree - 2 body paragraphs supporting your position. - Mention the opposite side briefly (1–2 sentences) if desired, but don't devote an entire body paragraph to it. Partly agree/disagree - 1 paragraph for each side. - Make it clear which side is stronger. Areas for Improvement Grammar & Sentence Structure - Several awkward or inaccurate phrases: "young generations" → young people / the younger generation "join an unrealistic lifestyle" → adopt unrealistic lifestyles "do not have good productivity" → have lower productivity Vocabulary - Vocabulary is adequate but somewhat repetitive (social media, young people, students). - Try using a wider range of expressions such as adolescents, teenagers, excessive screen time, online platforms, self-esteem. Estimated Band: 6.0

Wow Ayu! Really nice! I would give this a 6 ... Task Achievement — 6 The overview is there (good!), key trends are identified, and specific data is discussed. However, the introduction is very minimal ("The given bar chart provides information about…") — it needs more paraphrasing. Some data points may also be slightly imprecise. Coherence & Cohesion — 6 Clear paragraphing and a good range of linking devices ("On the other hand", "whereas", "After that"). The issue is "Next" as a paragraph opener — it's too informal/mechanical for Task 1. There's also a comma splice: "both proportions were similar, the proportions of home owners stood at…" Lexical Resource — 6 Good synonyms: declined, rose, accounted for, stood at, figure/proportion/percentage. Two problems though: "It is interesting to note that" is not appropriate in academic Task 1. Also "decreased slightly at around 35 percent" — should be 'to'. Grammatical Range & Accuracy — 6 A mix of sentence structures, but a few errors: the comma splice mentioned above, and "the proportion of home owners was the highest percentage" is an awkward construction mixing two different terms. Model Improved Version (Band 7-ish) The bar chart illustrates the percentages of people aged 25–34 in the United Kingdom who either owned or rented accommodation between 2004 and 2014. Overall, the proportion of homeowners declined steadily throughout the period, whereas the percentage of renters rose considerably. By 2014, renting had become more common than homeownership. In 2004, homeownership was at its highest point, at approximately 58%, before falling gradually to around 47% in 2010. In contrast, the figure for renters increased significantly from about 20% to nearly 40% over the same period. Between 2011 and 2012, the percentages of homeowners and renters became relatively similar, standing at around 43% and 41% respectively. After that, the proportion of homeowners continued to fall to roughly 35% in 2014, while the percentage of renters climbed to just under 50%.

@Manal Zia Hi Manal ! So I looked at your profile and it seems you haven't gone into any of the classrooms. That is where all the material is. Hours and hours worth of very important information. You are in the right place, take advantage of it. 👈👩‍🎓

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