Has anyone ever managed to sell fitness in a local market with a landing page successfully? (Any price range)

Hey folks, I’m currently running this funnel structure Opt in Application Schedule Call Running Meta ad traffic to this in a local market (fitness facility) My opt in rate is something like 5% or lower, just wondering what kind of funnel benchmark numbers you would expect Thanks Callum

Very short, very clean. Funny enough, it made me want to read more because it felt light. Does anyone else prefer short copy over long explanation?