Any thoughts on these loglines? I'm spinning out on loglines 😂 1) When a soulmate skeptic collides with four exes at a lavish wedding, she has one chaotic night to investigate her romantic past - or finally face the life she’s been running from. 2) When a soulmate skeptic is trapped at a lavish wedding with all four of her exes, she has one night to investigate the relationships she abandoned - or finally stop running from the one person who never left. 3) When a soulmate skeptic finds herself trapped at a lavish wedding with all four of her exes, she has one night to investigate the relationships she abandoned - and the one person she’s afraid to choose.

@Chad Desrochers I want to read more! I got Dan Brown vibes 🤗

I’m not rooting for either, I’m just rooting for my box to hit. 💰😂 I think I work best under pressure (or maybe that’s what I tell myself to justify procrastinating). The “never give up” and “there’s nothing you can’t do” mindset was instilled pretty early on for me, and now, showing my kids that mindset through action and not just words, has become a big driver for me. Had a bit of a bummer experience last night. Watched a movie and it had a beat almost identical to one in my script - same dialogue and everything!🤦‍♀️ Guess I'll be rewriting that!

@David Stem Now You See Me, Now You Don't. Not sure how many people have actually seen the third installment of the Now You See Me franchise 😂 It's a small thing, he says "They're dead", the others react in shock, then he says "to me... dead to me." I have something almost identical haha

On my shelf ☺️

Here's my notes of the sessions/rewrite process and the drafts, from original to 2nd rewrite. Rambled a bit - hope it makes sense! Original: Notes from the session: Dave Recap - “The issue was the opening. It felt competently written, but unmotivated. The scene existed because the writer wanted us to know certain things, not because the character needed to do them in that moment. So we slowed it down and asked: What is actually happening in her life right now? She’s about to go to a wedding where an ex will be present. Her roommate is moving out. Her support system is shifting. That pressure should drive her behavior. When emotional backstory appears before that pressure is felt, it reads as if the writer is spoon-feeding us information instead of letting us experience through the character. The fix isn’t cutting emotion—it’s earning it through action.” Opening is too cliché. Also confusing with the info dump. Take out character descriptions. Rewrite #1: Krystel Notes: Tried to open with Cassie in action – up since 4am doing something that is nostalgic and relaxing because she’s nervous about the wedding. Notes from the Session: Okay, but still too informational and ordinary. Two puzzles – confusing. Talked about My Best Friend’s Wedding as an example of a great rom-com opening. Why do we care about Cassie? Rewrite #2 Krystel Notes: Watched a bunch of rom-com openings. Watched Dave’s “Creating a Great Opening – mini course” Thought about the wound and the lie – her wound is her mother died when she was in High School and it wrecked her father. It made her view love as a risk, that if she lets herself love, it will wreck her too. The lie is, to be safe, she has to keep running away from commitment of any kind, not let herself feel too deeply. Challenged because the whole movie is set in one day, basically two locations. So how could I get the reader to be invested in Cassie in the first page, with her by herself in her room? Also, because the story is written whodunnit style, I struggled with letting go of planting clues in the beginning. Then, I realized that some of the info I was planting, was also referenced later in the story – took those out, no need to say it twice. Helped the flow move faster. I did keep the puzzle and dress info because it’s super important to the story – I promise!

@David Stem added. thanks!

Another revision of The Soulmate List opening, if there's time 🤗