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Hey everyone! Working on tightening my logline for a comedy feature and would love feedback. Which one makes you most want to read the script? The title is "The Model Lisa."
1. A delusional small-town salon worker crashes a regional modeling competition convinced she is a star, until her fantasy collides with reality and threatens to cost her everything.
2. A small-town salon worker with zero self-awareness enters a regional modeling competition determined to prove she is a supermodel, no matter how far she has to bend reality to get there.
3. A delusional salon worker stumbles into modeling success and spirals into ego-fueled chaos, risking everything as her inflated self-image collides with the real world.
4. A delusional woman chases a late-blooming modeling dream, but as her ego grows she risks losing the only people who ever saw her clearly.
5. A wildly delusional salon worker bulldozes her way into a modeling competition with zero self-awareness, like Napoleon Dynamite in heels but louder, brasher, and completely unchecked.
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