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3 contributions to The Unexpected Shape Café
Not sure where to take this... Open to ideas
Without turning this into a complete therapy session I recently had a couple of pretty intense encounters with a family member of a former friend. It almost got physical. The interaction got me thinking about all the other instances that I got into a fight or almost got into a fight and I started this piece. The working title is "I still love you tho." On the 2nd verse I start to contextualize and speak about the reason why such instances occur but I feel like that is typical of my writing. I want to write about another instance but I feel like I got my point across pretty clear in this initial piece. I"m happy for any feed back. Please keep in mind that this a verse in a rap song so, I'm interested in suggestions on how I can add some nuance to the content. Thank you in advance! The work is below. Heart thumpin quicker with each step// a weak breathe// creeps pass the eclipse my lip pressed// hood 6th sense // I watched em from a block away// 8 or so heads that handle rocks like doctor Jay// bodies on the block minds still locked away// or perhaps it’s just not my day// I see them staring, i'm thinking is there anything that I’m carrying I could use as a weapon// In case these niggas start pressing// luckily I know some one who lives in this section// he just stepped from his porch to give me a dap and a blessing// I stopped for a second// to check in// To make my potential assailants, think I’m not stressing// maybe it was wise, maybe it wasn’t // I walked past, I heard subtle threats but they didn’t do nothin// I put on my headphones and asked why is it always the brothers?
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Not sure where to take this... Open to ideas
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Thank you so much for looking over my verse. I appreciate the feed back, i'll see if i can work shallow into the rhyme scheme or something similar. Yes! I liked the bodies line as well. It speaks to a common and complicated experience in certain neighborhoods. as I respond to me it makes me think about the frusteration that comes along with tryna rationalize wild situations. thanks again. Hopes all is well.
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yes hello calling writers who read poetry. Song lyrics, epics welcome. Surprise me. (I'll comment mine monthly, but you go first 🐽👀🫴🙏)
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3 likes • Oct 2
Here is a simple one I enjoy. Can't go wrong with Khalil Gibran. https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/58701/the-fox-56d23d517dadf
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This is the introduction thread. Say hi, tell us where you’re from and what your writing is all about! In your introduction, answer these 4 questions: ➡️ What is your name (preferred pronouns as well, if you don't mind) ➡️ Why did you decide to join The Unexpected Shape Café? ➡️ What is your favorite book? ➡️ What are you interested in writing about? We can’t wait to meet you! If you'd like to share anything else as well, feel free! And welcome!
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Hello All. My name Is Davin But I go By DAT (He/His) I'm an emcee (Rapper) and I'm looking for way to sharpen my skills out side of my main modality of expression. I love the writing of Rumi and Kahlil Gibran. I'd love to be able to convey really expansive ideas in very short language and I'm hoping that I will be able to practice that in a community such as this.
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New to the Platform, just looking around. I'm A Emcee and artist educator.

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